tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2159352127192240615.post4859632704785338042..comments2023-03-24T08:25:02.510-06:00Comments on Smith 9H 12-13: Allie Brown anneshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/00573450327737964454noreply@blogger.comBlogger7125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2159352127192240615.post-34449193090162086722012-10-01T21:02:12.554-06:002012-10-01T21:02:12.554-06:00Allie!
I had timed your memoir, and although it wa...Allie!<br />I had timed your memoir, and although it was really good, it was pretty long. You didn't make the time limit but your memoir made up for that in pictures. All your pictures went along perfectly with each memoir.I think repeating the photos twice through had made your memoir a lot longer. Your opener was adorable and I loved how you used the voice from the movie. At the beginning, you were kind of hard to understand and there was some static or something in the background. Also, at the end of your voicethread you should tie in your theme again. Nice work letting us know why each memoir was so important to you though!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2159352127192240615.post-51310131301802737832012-09-30T18:51:14.728-06:002012-09-30T18:51:14.728-06:00I really think you did a good job. Your theme rea...I really think you did a good job. Your theme really tied everything together. At some times I thought you were a little quiet but I think you have a really nice overall memoir.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2159352127192240615.post-60294984335234347222012-09-30T18:38:59.195-06:002012-09-30T18:38:59.195-06:00I liked how you stuck with one theme and your quot...I liked how you stuck with one theme and your quotes really described your one theme.If I were to grade you, I would give you a three.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2159352127192240615.post-9783654534668777722012-09-30T17:03:26.167-06:002012-09-30T17:03:26.167-06:00I liked your presentation a lot. Your theme of Oha...I liked your presentation a lot. Your theme of Ohana really tied everything together really well. Maybe at the end though, you could have tied it all together a little more than just saying your last story then ending. Other than that great job!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2159352127192240615.post-24411124599055922292012-09-30T11:48:59.373-06:002012-09-30T11:48:59.373-06:00Good Job Allie. Ohana is such a great theme. I l...Good Job Allie. Ohana is such a great theme. I loved all of your different stories. You used great detail and description. Maybe try eliminating the background noise and talking more clearly. Other than that, muy bien! I'd give you a 3 based on the rubric. Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2159352127192240615.post-65195945804142534982012-09-30T10:32:56.355-06:002012-09-30T10:32:56.355-06:00Your memoir was very good. I love your theme of Oh...Your memoir was very good. I love your theme of Ohana because it ties everything together perfectly. Your content was really good and it contained a lot of emotion. The only thing that you could have done is used your voice to express the emotion a little more. Other than that, I think your pictures were used very well and I would give your project a little over a 3.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2159352127192240615.post-5906512899465078862012-09-28T19:43:05.093-06:002012-09-28T19:43:05.093-06:00Good description in our voice. Good job including ...Good description in our voice. Good job including pictures and making it kind of like a slideshow. Good job including emotion into the presentation.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com