tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2159352127192240615.post6038130505717933721..comments2023-03-24T08:25:02.510-06:00Comments on Smith 9H 12-13: Elise Albeck anneshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/00573450327737964454noreply@blogger.comBlogger8125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2159352127192240615.post-84975363631345802912012-10-01T16:26:07.597-06:002012-10-01T16:26:07.597-06:00I thought your memoir was great. You voice sounded...I thought your memoir was great. You voice sounded fantastic and I really thought I was there with you. I think that you could have added some more pictures, but overall, I thought it was a great presentation.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2159352127192240615.post-13811632871322781402012-09-30T23:58:45.432-06:002012-09-30T23:58:45.432-06:00Elise, I really liked your memoir presentation. It...Elise, I really liked your memoir presentation. It was really cool to hear about your family experiences and traditions. Unlike some other family based memoirs, I was really able to relate to yours, which made it really cool to watch. I think it is really cool that you want to be a fashion designer and I hope that that dream comes true for you. My only advise would be to add more pictures of you and your family. Otherwise, great job!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2159352127192240615.post-8681994997084318252012-09-30T17:19:02.125-06:002012-09-30T17:19:02.125-06:00I liked your presentation a lot. Your voice had em...I liked your presentation a lot. Your voice had emotion in it which made it easier to listen to. The only thing was you could have had some more pictures. Other than that, great job!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2159352127192240615.post-57189840777066460122012-09-30T13:13:33.212-06:002012-09-30T13:13:33.212-06:00Elise-
The problem that hit me right away is the m...Elise-<br />The problem that hit me right away is the minimal use of pictures. I feel like the bare minimum was used and most of them weren't even personal pictures. I think more time could have been spent on your visuals. I really liked your word choice which made it captivating to the audience. Your speaking was articulate and full of emotional refection. Good job! aspeng2016https://www.blogger.com/profile/08016991434603325544noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2159352127192240615.post-34186024721401150582012-09-30T11:15:57.414-06:002012-09-30T11:15:57.414-06:00Very good job. It was a little long but you kept ...Very good job. It was a little long but you kept me hooked throughout the whole thing. Good use of emotions and descriptions. I would give your project about a 3.5Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2159352127192240615.post-61263216364049435042012-09-30T10:20:34.758-06:002012-09-30T10:20:34.758-06:00My favorite part about your memoir was how you use...My favorite part about your memoir was how you used your voice to tell the story. You did a really good job not making it not monotone, and very easy to listen to and understand. You didn't have transitions between each story, but you did make sure to give enough background details so each story made sense. I would also give your presentation a little over a 3.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2159352127192240615.post-80405642242037899742012-09-29T22:57:31.804-06:002012-09-29T22:57:31.804-06:00I enjoyed your memoir piece. Your memoir was over...I enjoyed your memoir piece. Your memoir was over five minutes but I enjoyed listening to your story! You had very good voice inflection on the whole piece and I only heard a few trip ups. The transitions between each memoir weren't exactly connected but your main theme did a very good job of this! I would give your presentation, based upon the rubric, a little above a 3.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2159352127192240615.post-80977850942152845032012-09-28T19:28:56.251-06:002012-09-28T19:28:56.251-06:00Great details. Good job including emotion into you...Great details. Good job including emotion into your voice. Overall great voicethread,I don't see any flaws.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com