tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2159352127192240615.post7079724110283693828..comments2023-03-24T08:25:02.510-06:00Comments on Smith 9H 12-13: Memoir Projectanneshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/00573450327737964454noreply@blogger.comBlogger6125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2159352127192240615.post-36278008301972913252012-10-02T10:15:08.677-06:002012-10-02T10:15:08.677-06:00All of your memoirs are so interesting and differe...All of your memoirs are so interesting and different, but you did a great job of connecting them back to your theme. The excerpts are really well written, and you had a lot of great vocabulary and captivating imagery! Your conclusion was really effective. Overall, you made an amazing memoir with a meaningful theme, well done! The only thing I would suggest is improving is voice inflection, emotion, and transitions, but only because there's always room for improvement! Would score at least 3.5, but probably closer to 4! Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2159352127192240615.post-43655614657908573782012-10-01T13:11:22.694-06:002012-10-01T13:11:22.694-06:00Overall I enjoyed my memoir, but I can still make ...Overall I enjoyed my memoir, but I can still make improvements. I liked how I used specific detail and described the situations in my memoirs clearly using good word choice. My memoir was a little to wordy and probably could have been shortened. Also, I could have added more to make the transitions flow more easily because at some times it's a random sentence at at the end at an excerpt. I could have used more inflection, but I still think that my narration made it interesting.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2159352127192240615.post-3358080686940865712012-10-01T12:51:35.036-06:002012-10-01T12:51:35.036-06:00I really liked how you connected every bad moment ...I really liked how you connected every bad moment back to your family and how they helped you in so many ways. you really show how much your family means to you and your memoir turned out really good! Also, your voice was very clear which made it easy to understand. Your memoirs all connected back to each other even though they were so different and your theme was really cool. I thought this was a really good memoir! Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2159352127192240615.post-15909301743024477852012-09-30T23:09:47.839-06:002012-09-30T23:09:47.839-06:00This comment has been removed by the author.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2159352127192240615.post-48123840990286775862012-09-30T22:22:39.645-06:002012-09-30T22:22:39.645-06:00This is fantastic! :) Your descriptions are vivid ...This is fantastic! :) Your descriptions are vivid and the pictures are great too. I agree with Ally about the connections to your family. I also love your conclusion. Awesome job!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2159352127192240615.post-15908342515355342252012-09-29T18:40:34.929-06:002012-09-29T18:40:34.929-06:00This comment has been removed by the author.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com