This is good, but you don't have a theme that ties everything together. Also maybe add some emotion in your voice. I really like the peice about your sister. Overall, good job!
I agree with Ethan in that your voice was very unemotional and it sounded as if your were reading a verdict not telling your life story. Overall though it met the expectations.
This seemed organized, but I couldn't figure out what the connecting thread was for all of them. Also, your voice sounded pretty unemotional, but other than that it was good.
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ReplyDeleteThis is good, but you don't have a theme that ties everything together. Also maybe add some emotion in your voice. I really like the peice about your sister. Overall, good job!
ReplyDeleteGood descriptions of the experiences and creative word choice. Your voice, however, was somewhat monotone and lacked inflection. Overall, great work.
ReplyDeleteI agree with Ethan in that your voice was very unemotional and it sounded as if your were reading a verdict not telling your life story. Overall though it met the expectations.
ReplyDeleteThis seemed organized, but I couldn't figure out what the connecting thread was for all of them. Also, your voice sounded pretty unemotional, but other than that it was good.
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