I like your closing sentence, and how it relates back to the title/theme. I am also a swimmer and can relate to parts of your voice thread. The only thing I would change is the recordings. They were too quite, I could barely hear you. Other than that good job!
I really enjoyed your project. I liked your theme and how everything you talk/wrote about connected back to your theme. My only advice is to speak up. you were very quiet! but good job!!! :) -Emily Harden
Great job Max. I like how you had something that really did tie your memoirs together that was easy to tell. I also loved the changes between using your voice, and using excerpts from your memoirs (it that's what they were). Great job! Do speak up a bit though.
Good job. You had a great common theme and all your pictures really helped accent your theme. I also like the fact that you did a mix of text and voice. One problem though-you were very quite. Next time, just move the mic closer to your mouth or talk louder. Overall, great job.
I love how you connected all of your memoirs together and how smooth your traditions were. I love how you described some scenes, it really made the listener feel like they were there. But mostly I would say that some of your memoir excerpts might have been just a bit too short and there wasn't mush room for explanation. Over all a very good memoir.
I like your closing sentence, and how it relates back to the title/theme. I am also a swimmer and can relate to parts of your voice thread. The only thing I would change is the recordings. They were too quite, I could barely hear you. Other than that good job!
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed your project. I liked your theme and how everything you talk/wrote about connected back to your theme. My only advice is to speak up. you were very quiet! but good job!!! :)
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Great job Max. I like how you had something that really did tie your memoirs together that was easy to tell. I also loved the changes between using your voice, and using excerpts from your memoirs (it that's what they were). Great job! Do speak up a bit though.
ReplyDeleteGood job. You had a great common theme and all your pictures really helped accent your theme. I also like the fact that you did a mix of text and voice. One problem though-you were very quite. Next time, just move the mic closer to your mouth or talk louder. Overall, great job.
ReplyDeleteI love how you connected all of your memoirs together and how smooth your traditions were. I love how you described some scenes, it really made the listener feel like they were there. But mostly I would say that some of your memoir excerpts might have been just a bit too short and there wasn't mush room for explanation. Over all a very good memoir.
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