Saturday, February 2, 2013

Scribe Period 3 2-1-13

Hello everyone and happy February!

We started class out by listening to announcements and then turning in our CSAP Packet (Words to Live By) and our sentences for grammar this week.

Then Smith passed out our DOL 8 quiz and we took that.

Afterwards, Smith did a practice example of the outline she provided for our 1984/Little Brother paper (due 2/14/13).

She gave us guidance on how to write and set up our points for each paragraph. Her example points were: we have learned the power of the group, we have not learned the power of the individual.

Introduction:
  • Attention getter - your attention getter does not just have to be a quote, use video, or other sources. be creative, there are many possibilities!
  • Explain attention getter - give a point behind your attention getter, do not use "this quote means..."
  • Background information - give big picture ideas on both LB and 1984, possibly on your modern examples as well. try to stick to 1 sentence each!
  • Present other side - this piece can blend with your thesis. try to show that you acknowlegde the other side's ideas and viewpoints.
  • Thesis - Smith gave us this example thesis (fill in your points where the ellipses are).
    • "Although society has learned ..., society still falls short with ....; as a result, ...."
    • This thesis is a building point and does not have to be constructed this way. Play around with it! It is your paper!

Make sure to match up your body paragraphs with the structure of your thesis! Keep consistent!
Also, it is strongly encouraged that your points build off each other, this is because it makes a stronger argument.

Body paragraph: what we have learned: power of the group

When setting up examples, be sure to explain what is happening in the story. Your reader must understand what is happening in the book to understand the quote you use. For your explanations, never say "this quote means". Be sure to connect your quotes to the main idea of the paragraph. In this case, the power of the group. Then connect it to what we have learned which will be your connection to the thesis. Then repeat with your other book example as well as your modern. 

  • topic sentence with why
  • set up first point
  • lead-in, “quote” (citation).
  • explanation of quote- what does quote say
  • connect quote to paragraph
  • connect quote to thesis
  • transition
  • set-up second point
  • lead-in, “quote” (citation).
  • explanation of quote- what does quote say
  • connect quote to paragraph
  • connect quote to thesis
  • transition
  • set-up modern example
  • lead-in, “quote” (citation).
  • explanation of quote- what does quote say
  • connect quote to paragraph
  • connect quote to thesis
  • Concluding sentence

Body Paragraph: what we haven’t learned: power of the individual

For this paragraph, you can repeat the same format as the have learned paragraph. You need to keep in mind how your points build off each other. Remember! Keep your argument strong! 

  • topic sentence with why
  • set up first point
  • lead-in, “quote” (citation).
  • explanation of quote- what does quote say
  • connect quote to paragraph
  • connect quote to thesis
  • transition
  • set-up second point
  • lead-in, “quote” (citation).
  • explanation of quote- what does quote say
  • connect quote to paragraph
  • connect quote to thesis
  • transition
  • set-up modern example
  • lead-in, “quote” (citation).
  • explanation of quote- what does quote say
  • connect quote to paragraph
  • connect quote to thesis
  • Concluding sentence

Body paragraph: where are we going: groups force individuals to follow blindly

For this paragraph, build your argument even further. Show how your points build to this point. You can effectively complete this paragraph by starting with something small and then leading up to something larger. 

  • topic sentence with why
  • set up first point
  • lead-in, “quote” (citation).
  • explanation of quote- what does quote say
  • connect quote to paragraph
  • connect quote to thesis
  • transition
  • set-up second point
  • lead-in, “quote” (citation).
  • explanation of quote- what does quote say
  • connect quote to paragraph
  • connect quote to thesis
  • transition
  • set-up modern example
  • lead-in, “quote” (citation).
  • explanation of quote- what does quote say
  • connect quote to paragraph
  • connect quote to thesis
  • Concluding sentence

Concluding paragraph: solution: celebrate our differences 

The build-up of this paragraph can resemble the previous one! Start small and work your way towards something that impacts the audience more! Make this paragraph and paper count. Your audience should understand your points. Impress them!

  • restate thesis
  • How will problem be solved
  • Review points made
  • Connect to solution
  • connect to attention getter- leave lasting thoughts


After Smith helped us, she let us have free work time on our outlines. We had about ten minutes to do so. Also during that time, people who had not given their website links came up to Smith's computer and entered them in. Smith put out her planner so that people could sign up for meetings with her.

Homework:
Smith HIGHLY recommends that you get your thesis and most of your outline done over this weekend. She said it will help you succeed later on next week!

Have a great weekend. Here's a picture of a cute cat:


See you all on Monday!

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