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For starters, you don't need a picture for every sentence. Your voice thread should be five minutes, tops. Other than that, you have good vocal inflection and interesting topics, although I got bored because the video was so long. Your ideas flowed together nicely and the pictures are well organized. Overall, just shorten it and you'll be golden.
I enjoyed the stories and experiences as well as your descriptions of how they changed you. The visuals enhanced the presentation and were used creatively, which added a great deal to the presentation as well. The only thing that might be changed is breaking the recordings up between slides, since one recording can transverse multiple slides. Besides this minor issue, I thoroughly enjoyed the presentation.
Ethan, I really liked the stories you told, and how you connected them all together. I also thught it was great how you balanced the good stories with the bad, it made it so it wasn't too weighed down one way or the other. Other than my computer freaing out and skipping a few of your slides (my fault not yours), I really enjoyed your project. :)
I really like the detail of your memoir. I also like how you chose to use so many pictures, it enhanced the whole piece. You organized the whole thing really well, especially with all the pictures. Your transitions were good too. Good job!
It felt like there could have been a lot more detail in some of the stories, like at first I didn't quite get how the beginning of the story connected together. I also thought that sometimes it was unnecessary to need to circle things in some pictures. You did use nice tone of voice to help with your story, like when you talked about your brother I could hear how much you loved him.