Friday, September 28, 2012

Dom B.A. Memoir

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  1. You have some pretty cool pictures. However, record more voice. Don't let the pictures guide the piece, tell the piece and let the pictures help tell the story. You did pretty good, but you need an overlapping idea and some quotes from each memoir

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    1. You have an amazing start, and I can defiantly picture the scenes you describe. Focus on making concise ideas and remarks from each memoir and HOW they tie into the overlapping idea.

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  3. Nicely done, Dom. I liked your little sound effects like the "ahhh" for the relaxing part. Good organization, though you could have recorded your voice a little more. I'd also give photo credits if you got them off of the internet.... Overall, very nice piece! Good job :)

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    1. Nice job Dom, you had interesting pictures and you organized it well. You also had some good sound affects that really added to the pictures. Maybe add more voice than text, but other than that it was great.

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  4. Well done Dom. I like your memoir and I thought it had great picture and sound effects. I think to make it a little more interesting you should try to add more voice. Maybe include more of your excerpts. Overall it's really good.

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  5. You did a very good job on your voice thread. You seemed very calm and cool when you were speaking, and I could tell that you practiced. I really liked how you did your opening and closing pages. I feel you are lacking a theme or a major idea, but otherwise the voice thread is perfect. You had some very cool pictures. Great Job!

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  6. Good job, Dom! I thought it was very interesting how you organized it and I liked the different sound effects. This added more of a sophisticated aspect to your memoirs. Like Nate said, you could use more voice and maybe add some more detail on each memoir. Adding more detail will help watchers understand the background information and the purpose of each memoir. Maybe you could add more emotion in your voice, but I thought that you deserve a 3. Overall, it was nicely done, Dom!!!

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