I thought you did a very good job of connecting all the pieces into one main subject, but it rambled on a bit too long. You used good vocabulary and the quality of your voice recordings were very well done.
My personal reflection is that I think that some of my pictures didn't really fit with what I was saying, mostly just because I just don't have photos of those things, but still. I also think that sometimes my voice sounds a bit strained and unnatural. I have to work on making my thoughts flow with less effort and connect more smoothly.