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Nice memoir! I really liked how you combined the pictures and the writing. You spoke really clearly, however i think that you could have spoken in a little less of a monotone. You had some really good writing, but I didn't hear that excitement in your voice. It was still a really good memoir, there are just a few things you need to fix.
Great voice clarity I could understand everything you said. More excitement in your voice. Great stories about your family! Maybe double check some of the mistakes, good job overall
Zach I think you did a great job with your voice thread. You did an awesome job at explaining thing and your voice was very clear. I did n't find any mistakes! Well done
I really liked your transitions and how you incorporated specific details without making it too choppy. Your images tied along with your speaking part very well, but I would try to talk with more inflection, but your voice was clear otherwise.
I worked hard to develop outlines that I made into one script to make my voice thread more organized. I put my memoirs in time order to make them have a logical order to them. I also had an opening statement, but not much of an closing statement. I would give myself a 3 because I had most of the content necessary but not all of it. I provided background information that was in context and from other people comments I feel like I did a pretty good job keeping the audience entertained and attentive. With those factors I would give myself a 3. I spoke loudly while recording, I also spoke at a reasonable pace so people could understand me. I also pronounced words well so the audience could understand me. The only things I could have done better was my inflection. I did have emotion in my voice, but maybe not as much as I could have, that is why I would give myself a 3.5. My pictures were all relevant and used to enhance my voice recordings. I also feel that they pictures were strategic in the sense that they were in time order to make the stories easier to progress through. I would give myself a 3.5 in this section. I prepared a lot for this recording. I wrote out a script for each segment and I practiced it before recording and I would record multiple times until I got my script right on the recording. I also stayed close to the time limit. I would give myself a 4 in this section. Overall, I feel like I did a very good job and I put a lot of time into this project so my overall score would be a 17 out of 20 or an 85%.
Great job Zach! I really enjoyed your memoir and thought that your voice clarity was great! Overall you did a really good job, just add a little excitement to your voice and you will be golden. Overall great job.