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Great job! The voice inflection and emotion is awesome! The memoirs connected with the main theme really well. I agree with Lauren about slowing down a little, but otherwise, everything else was fantastic. :)
Self Evaluation: Overall, I think that I did pretty well. I put hard work and time into it, and feel like it came out well. I think that I should have slowed down, because that would help the clarity of my voice. Also, it would be better if I had put a little more background in. Other then that, I'm proud of my project and love that it is mine.I would give myself a 2.5 to 3.
I really enjoyed watching your memoir and thought it was good. I think you could have put some more background information in because I was consistently asking myself who this person was or what that is. I really loved how you could actually hear emotion in your voice because in the other memoirs people would just talk. You actually showed how you were feeling.
Rebecca I loved your memoirs, I can tell you put a lot of effort and time in to your final memoir. I thought that you voice inflection could have been a little more interesting at times. But I loved you inflection when you were talking about your piano recital. I think you could have put a little more background information in it to let the viewer know more about you. I really liked all of your pictures, especially the ones where you were little. Great Job!
I like how you spoke clearly, and fluently. You weren't choppy, and had a very confident tone in your voice. You may want to slow down a little though, It was hard to keep up with the speed of your voice sometimes. Also, sometimes your voice didn't really seem to match the tone of the memoir you were talking about. Other than that, I enjoyed the pictures, and thought it was really good!
I loved your memoir, Carlson! You did an excellent job in detail and writing and telling the watchers your purpose in writing every piece. If you had to work on something, I think maybe you could slow down just a bit. I loved the emotion Carlson! Great job! Also, you gave a fair amount of background information and the media was used accordingly. Awesome!
Great memoir! I liked how you blended all of your stories together, I also enjoyed all of the emotion in your voice! I think the only thing that you could have done better is change the tone of your voice depending on the tone you are trying to convey. Overall great job though!:)