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I enjoyed the opening, it has a way of connecting all your memoirs to you. There was a high sense of sophistication to your piece. The pictures accompanied the memoir nicely. Your video was over the time limit, which is probably do to all your details, which are great, but we don't need all of them. Based on the rubric I would give you a 3-3 1/2.
Ethan-Your introduction and conclusion both were very strong and achieved exactly what they needed to by tying the whole thing together. The use of digital media in your presentation was good but it could have been advanced in a way that showed your personality so that the audience could see who you are on the inside and what you are like as a person. I could hear the sentiment in your voice which added to the meaning of your project. Overall, you did a very good job.
Great word use and voice inflection. Your pictures helped accent your words. your voice thread is a little long, but not too bad. Overall, great job.
I think I did a good job of using emotion in my writing and voice and the accompanying visuals enhanced the experience. I could have shortened my presentation to meet the time requirement as well as adding some more interesting use of digital media. Overall, I think I accomplished the task of the assignment and displayed excellence in my writing.
Your writing displays great word choice and sentence fluency, so no matter if you put forth your best work or not, it will always be very well written. In this case I liked your video and the emotion in your voice. You gathered great images and the time wasn't too, too long but it could have been shortened a bit.
Ethan, you are able to speak very clearly. I think that you include strong emotion in your voice. I enjoyed your introduction and pictures that you included. Your word choice is excellent. I feel that your audio was a bit loud at times which made listening sort of hard. I think that you need to have a conclusion because it would help the project feel completed and tie it all together. Overall, this project is a 3.5 based on the rubric. :)
Ethan,NIce job. Your speaking was very good and had little to no mistakes. I loved all the pictures you included in your presentation. It told a story and kept me very involved.
Ethan- I think your speaking was flawless, and it really showed plenty of emotion in your memoir to keep your readers/viewers interested. I also thought that your visual media helped tell your memoirs well. Your word choice was great as well. Overall, good job.
Ethan I thought that you did an awesome job with your memoir. You used literary devices, emotions, and complex wording really well. The pictures you included were very good as well. Overall it was a very well done and thought out VoiceThread.