Thursday, September 27, 2012

Taylor Verbsky's Memoir

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  2. I love the piece about your little cottage! That was so awesome. My only suggestion is trying to connect your memoirs a little more by adding a title page or something. And I loved the music with the swim lesson memoir. I liked the ending with the poem- I almost wish you had more slides, though. Overall, it was a wonderful piece!

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  4. I loved your memoir, and how your listeners are treated to fun stories. Like everyone else, I think that you should try to connect your pieces together, make the whole thing flow together because right now it feels pretty choppy. I like how in your swim piece you said that you were still in contact with people who you met many years before. I thought that your memoir was good, and would be amazing if it flowed together. Nicely done!

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  5. Your memoir was great, Taylor! Your voice was very clear and you didn't have any slip-ups. Very good! I also liked how you had sound effects. I would have tried to make everything connect a little bit more, though. It was good how you related the stuff that happened in the past back to today. Your pictures were also very good- I liked how you made collages. Overall, very good job!

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  6. Your memoir was great! Your voice was very clear and easy to follow. I would improve your transitions though. It feels a little choppy right now, but the ideas are still really good. I would also add more info on who Patrick is. I liked your collage at the end a lot and thought the pictures helped to tell your story. Good Job!

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  7. Good job Taylor. I like your slides because they were like collages. I also liked that one of your excerpts was a poem. But your voice seems kind of draggy and sluggish. Other than that good job!

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  8. Taylor, you did an amazing job! It was very good visuals to keep us interested, and the purpose is clear. However, I thought you could have added more ways to connect your pieces and maybe add more detail in some, but overall it was outstanding! You have an organized presentation and your vocal inflection was great. Good job using pictures! I loved it!

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  9. I would give myself a 3 for my memoir project. Overall I know that I struggled with my transitions from memoir to memoir, and giving enough background information. Yet I thought that my voice was clear and understandable the whole time, without any mistakes. After looking at other people's memoir's I thought that I could have some more slides, so that I could include more pictures, but at the time I didn't think of that. So that is why I would give myself a 3.

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