Good description in our voice. Good job including pictures and making it kind of like a slideshow. Good job including emotion into the presentation.
Your memoir was very good. I love your theme of Ohana because it ties everything together perfectly. Your content was really good and it contained a lot of emotion. The only thing that you could have done is used your voice to express the emotion a little more. Other than that, I think your pictures were used very well and I would give your project a little over a 3.
Good Job Allie. Ohana is such a great theme. I loved all of your different stories. You used great detail and description. Maybe try eliminating the background noise and talking more clearly. Other than that, muy bien! I'd give you a 3 based on the rubric.
I liked your presentation a lot. Your theme of Ohana really tied everything together really well. Maybe at the end though, you could have tied it all together a little more than just saying your last story then ending. Other than that great job!
I liked how you stuck with one theme and your quotes really described your one theme.If I were to grade you, I would give you a three.
I really think you did a good job. Your theme really tied everything together. At some times I thought you were a little quiet but I think you have a really nice overall memoir.
Allie!I had timed your memoir, and although it was really good, it was pretty long. You didn't make the time limit but your memoir made up for that in pictures. All your pictures went along perfectly with each memoir.I think repeating the photos twice through had made your memoir a lot longer. Your opener was adorable and I loved how you used the voice from the movie. At the beginning, you were kind of hard to understand and there was some static or something in the background. Also, at the end of your voicethread you should tie in your theme again. Nice work letting us know why each memoir was so important to you though!