This is really good! I like how you keep referrring back to the poem, and how you show the timeline. The only thing i might change is that it is a little long, but I think that it works. It needs to be long to get your point across, and show how you've changed.
Tusa! I loved your memoir and how you incorporate the text, images, and voice all together. Also, the timeline was convenient with reminding us of how old you are, and the poem is a creative idea. Only thing I would change is that the transition from slide to slide is a little choppy, especially at the friend part (with Morgan and Clair) with connecting the schools. Nicely done though, and I felt like you do did a nice job! :)
This is super good! You had great sensory imagery and I felt like I could actually see what was happening. I also loved the sarcasm you incorporated in this. Your voice is very clear and the audio is great! The images were awesome as well. I also liked how you had the text next to the pictures. It made the whole thing easier to follow. However, there were some awkward pauses, I might've shortened them. Overall, a very nice memoir! Oh, and those pictures are adorable! You're so cute!
I loved the title- and how you used the timeline; it is not too nerdy. Your voice inflection was wonderful and I loved your images. Maybe a little shorter? You gotta stop being so awesome, girl.
I thought I did a 3.5 job. I definitely could have added more emotion, provoked more thought in watchers, and shortened my piece a little. However, I think I have people enough background information, it moves logically and has an effective opening and ending statement. I practiced and thought my piece, with the timeline and poetry embedded was unique. Also, I can work on making the piece a little smoother. For a first piece, it was nice, but not outstanding. :)
This is really good! I like how you keep referrring back to the poem, and how you show the timeline. The only thing i might change is that it is a little long, but I think that it works. It needs to be long to get your point across, and show how you've changed.
ReplyDeleteTusa! I loved your memoir and how you incorporate the text, images, and voice all together. Also, the timeline was convenient with reminding us of how old you are, and the poem is a creative idea. Only thing I would change is that the transition from slide to slide is a little choppy, especially at the friend part (with Morgan and Clair) with connecting the schools. Nicely done though, and I felt like you do did a nice job! :)
ReplyDeleteThis is super good! You had great sensory imagery and I felt like I could actually see what was happening. I also loved the sarcasm you incorporated in this. Your voice is very clear and the audio is great! The images were awesome as well. I also liked how you had the text next to the pictures. It made the whole thing easier to follow. However, there were some awkward pauses, I might've shortened them. Overall, a very nice memoir! Oh, and those pictures are adorable! You're so cute!
ReplyDeleteI loved the title- and how you used the timeline; it is not too nerdy. Your voice inflection was wonderful and I loved your images. Maybe a little shorter? You gotta stop being so awesome, girl.
ReplyDeleteI thought I did a 3.5 job. I definitely could have added more emotion, provoked more thought in watchers, and shortened my piece a little. However, I think I have people enough background information, it moves logically and has an effective opening and ending statement. I practiced and thought my piece, with the timeline and poetry embedded was unique. Also, I can work on making the piece a little smoother. For a first piece, it was nice, but not outstanding. :)
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