Friday, September 28, 2012

Mollie Gardner Memoir

11 comments:

  1. I enjoyed how you kept the theme of a puzzle on through your video. You kept it short and concise which helps the person watching stay interested. The ending of your piece was very strong, and I liked how you tied all the pieces together. Your voice inflection could have been stronger, but it was very good! Each memoir may have had no connection but they got pulled together under your theme. I would give it a 3- 3 1/2 based on the rubric.

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  2. I really liked how you tied together all those different things so well! At times your voice was a little quiet and after you finished the speaking part, it took a while for the slide to change so you might want to think about fixing that. Overall, it was really good and I enjoyed watching it!

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  3. I think you did a good job keeping it short enough so that it is right around the time limit. Also you made sure to use your theme in each story and at the end to tie everything together. Each story contained good reflection, but I think if you put in a little more background information or a transition it might have been a little easier to understand. Overall your memoir was very good, and I would give it a little over a 3 too.

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  4. Mollie,
    Your piece flowed pretty well but try some more transitions. I liked how you tied in the puzzle pieces! that was creative. Maybe try to tell a little bit more story in each slide. But great job!!

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  5. Overall I would give myself a 3 and 1/2. I liked my theme and thought it tied everything together well but, I needed to add some more background information to the stories. Also, at times it was very hard to hear myself.

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  6. I liked how you used the puzzle theme the whole time, and then at the end tied it all together with how each thing is pieces of your life. Your presentation was a little short so you could have used some more detail in explaining each piece, but overall good job. I really did like it a lot.

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  7. Mollie, I like the theme of your project. I enjoy that your pictures were in puzzle form. I felt it went with what you were trying to convey. I think you are a little soft-spoken in your recordings and should try to include more emotion. I think you need to have a stronger conclusion that really makes the listener think. Also, some of your text is hard to read. I would definitely give you a 3.5 on this project. Well done!

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  8. I think you tied your project together well and I like your theme! You could try to conclude your presentation better and use stronger verbs. Good job!

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  9. I really enjoyed watching your video, over all. I liked the theme a lot, and it was well put together. I could clearly see how all of the memoirs were a piece of the puzzle of your life. I think that you could've maybe connected your memoirs a little bit better. and add a bit of a better conclusion, but all in all, it was a very good presentation.

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  10. Mollie, I thought you did a really nice job on your video. It was interesting and for the most part, flowed well. I loved how you tied in your puzzle theme by making the pictures puzzles. My only advise is to make some of the words easier to read. Overall, great job!

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  11. Hey Mollie! I really enjoyed the fact that you made the theme a puzzle. It was really cool how you made the pictures into puzzle pieces. I do think that you could have had a better conclusion, but all in all I thought it was a great presentation.

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